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Grabbing readers with Chapter One


Today I reread Chapter One of Elephant Creek.

I must admit I’m liking what I have done. I hope you do too.

Chapter one

Over the weekend I finished a writing reference Write On! The Writer’s Help Book by Adrian Magson, a read I’d recommend to aspiring and established writers alike. This book reinforced the fundamentals of writing a story that grabs readers (among other things).

It is vital to continue to read writing references to improve your craft.

With a book vying for a readership, the blurb will hopefully gain interest, but when potential readers open the book to read the first couple of pages, they’ll be hooked like a fish on a line or fishtailing it across the ocean, not looking back.

The first chapter questions:

  • Does that first chapter have the reader wanting more?
  • Is it short and to the point?
  • Is it either introducing the main protagonist or setting up a theme?
  • Does it have the right pace?
  • Is their conflict, questions, danger, enticement, part revelations or emotions?

Let’s test it.

I’m going to show you my raw (remember I’m only four chapters into the story and will draft and edit many more times) first chapter of Elephant Creek. Let me know if you like it and if you would read further. I would love your opinion, dear reader.

First Chapter Elephant Creek

“Picture perfect, eh, girl?” Derick smiled, patting Sasha’s wide head as she sat on the worn passenger seat. With her tongue lolling towards the window breeze, she panted in doggy happiness.

The sound of the battered ute broke through the squawking flock of white cockatoos swooping above through the orange, pink, purple sky as the sun faded in the west. Colour reflected on the smooth waters of Currumbin Creek, flashing through the gum trees lining the road’s edge. A full moon had risen in the eastern sky casting light and shadows as a non-dark night descended.

“Don’t let on to Crystal I let you sit in her seat,” Derick said to the dog, chuckling to himself and watching the road. The tan Staffordshire Terrier turned, grinning her approval with a wide gummy-fanged smile.

Derick was a cautious driver. If anything he’d mostly driven under the speed limit. It was probably because he’d often had precious cargo with him; his wife, kid, the grandchild and his beloved dogs. Boss before Sasha and there’d probably be another after the old girl.

Placing his left hand on Sasha’s stomach tumour, a frown creased his mouth. Aged, rheumy eyes welled, making him wipe them with a curled finger. Seriously, he was becoming a sook in his old age. Well, he wasn’t exactly old, but he was turning 66 soon. It was a hell of a lot older than 26, but he didn’t feel much different, despite a few aches. He knew he should give up the cigarette’s too, but he had to have at least one vice.

Sasha let out a sharp bark. Derick took his eyes off the road for a second, glancing at the dog, seeing her nip towards a red dot of light on the dash. Yapping excitedly, she scraped her paws at it, trying to bite it with her teeth.

Derick slowed the car. Perplexed, he glanced up the road wondering about the light source. A blinding flash forced him to momentarily shut his eyes. Slamming his foot on the brake. The car skidded, veering to the side of the road. Blinded except for the violet light still burning under his eyelids, he lifted one arm to shield his eyes. With white knuckles, he gripped the steering wheel, trying to stay on the road he could no longer see.

Tyres screeched. Gravel crunched. The steering wheel spun out of his hands. Glass smashed. Metal ground. As the airbags slammed into his chest and face, Derick felt his lungs explode. The walls of the car closed in around him.

The last things he heard were Sasha’s high-pitched yelp and screams not coming from the squealing tyres.

A different start for a reason.

The chapter is unlike the starts to The Zanzibar Moon and Kendwa’s Secret, but don’t worry there will be steamy chapters early. This time though there is a more complicated plot that ties all three books together. Some of you may remember Derick from Kendwa’s Secret. I won’t spoil who he is for new readers (he’s a likeable guy who may play a bigger part). Ali will return too. And what of Jai? You’ll have to read it to find out.

The blurb for Elephant Creek

The sequel to The Zanzibar Moon brings all three books to a final enthralling, emotional conclusion.

Emma has a dilemma. Does she keep dating rock-star handsome Wade or pursue her crush on sexy, silent Toby, who doesn’t even seem interested in her anyway?

“Wade, the Tinder dater, will either swipe left or become a stalker,” warns her sister Jessy.

Emma and Toby clash over the details of Toby’s father’s car accident, but she only wants to help. To make matters worse she thinks there is a police conspiracy, but she can’t convince stubborn Toby. After one too many visits she discovers the old circus elephant living out its days on his family’s property. Toby warns her to never return.

Toby has enough problems without falling for delightful, spirited Emma. His young daughter, Hope has started mainstream school and he’s worried she’ll be bullied. After years of working a covert operation in North Queensland teaching the Defence Force how to avoid crocodiles, he discovers his nephew was in his hometown.

Furious that Emma’s sister has Kendwa’s son – will he take what’s rightfully his or leave the little boy to live with the family he clearly loves?

Ali can’t get over Toby’s resemblance to Kendwa and how little Jai is growing up with no fear of danger and the spitting image of both. But a little boy in suburban Queensland does not need an uncle with a shady past and temper.

When Hope is attacked at the local school, Jai shows his true family traits by sticking up for the little Down’s Syndrome girl even though there will be a price to pay.

Will Toby ever believe Emma’s version of events to bring his guard down long enough to let love back into his life and save his father’s reputation?

Who can any of them believe when every white lie turns into deception?

Elephant Creek by Donna Munro
The sample cover of Elephant Creek by Donna Munro

COMING IN LATE 2019

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5 Writing Prompts to Get Creative


5 Writing prompts to get creative

Sometimes we need a little nudge to push those creative juices down the inspiration slope to flow into the ocean of ingenuity. Here’s just five to help with you lack of progress, writer’s block, work stoppage, late-arvo-down-in-the dumps, idea famine, brain drain or whatever else is stopping your creative process.

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5 prompts

  1. Close your eyes, stand up, spin around the room (or backyard, café, beach – wherever you are), stop. Now open your eyes. What are you looking at? Draw inspiration from it. I opened my eyes to see a plush monkey holding a heart. It was a valentine’s gift from my granddaughter that says, “I love you. I love you,” (a monotone recording that says those words). It’s made me think of how precious my grandchildren are. That’s an easy prompt to inspire me. How did you go?
  2. Stretch your neck. Rub your own shoulders for at least five minutes. Feel the tension ebb away. Now that you are more relaxed recall the creative block you think is holding up your progress. Tell yourself, “Hey, blockage get out of here. I have work to do and don’t need you. Good bye.” Yes, it’s a mind trick but see if it works. I spend a lot of time talking to myself (what writer doesn’t) and this technique works for me. It’s like how my friend Kerry the Healer reminds me that our words are powerful.
  3. Find a large piece of paper. Scribble. Draw. Doodle. Write. Keep at it till you see something on that paper that starts creativity flowing. It could be a word or an image. You may have scribbled in spirals, but that image could urge you to write about a cyclone ravaging a small town. Doodling is like looking at clouds. You’ll see an image no one else sees. It’s your own creative mind that finds it.
  4. Whether you’re a writer, artist, marketer or whatever, think of a vivid colour. What does that colour make you think of? Say it’s yellow: it might be a sunflower, sunshine, happiness or it could be urine stains on a white sheet, post it notes all over your to-do list, nicotine stained teeth. See, different thoughts for different projects.
  5. A fun one to finish. Think of the funniest thing that has ever happened to you. Write about it. Let your laughter flow as you write. Try not to wet the paper or your keyboard as the tears of hilarity stream down your cheeks. I don’t know what this will prompt you to do creatively, but at least I’ve made you smile.

Enjoy your creativity!